highlighted in purple the parts that must be revise or conjo

highlighted in purple the parts that must be revise or conjo.
highlighted in purple the parts that must be revise or conjoined. This is the only change that must be made for this paper that my professor is requesting. The second sentence highlighted in purple at the bottom of my introductory paragraph is the thesis statement. Hence, my professor asked me to take this thesis statement and plug into the first topic sentence ( first sentence highlighted in purple) to make thesis the beginning statement. While keeping everything thereafter. I have been having a great deal of trying to make the change by myself as i am an one who overstates and its evident in the three new changes I have come up with but are overstated. This is an literary analysis essay as an English major. My own examples i came up with but are too long are:1. thesis #1= Story of An Hour by author Kate Chopin wrestles upon the stagnant ideas of marriage and womanhood of the 19th century, by drawing parallels with concrete and abstract terms as love, powerless, and truth with hidden misconceptions held within marriage.2. thesis #2= Story of An hour wrestles upon the stagnant ideals of marriage and womanhood of the 19th century in drawing parallels with terms as love, powerless, and truth with hidden misconceptions held within marriage.3. thesis #3=The author Kate Chopin in Story of An Hour introduces the protagonist Louise to show the unseen scenarios within wedlock households of that time. Chopin wrestles upon the ideals of marriage and womanhood by drawing parallels in concrete and abstract terms as love, powerless, and truth with hidden misconceptions held within marriage.These examples i have are too long and overstated, and i have tried to shorten them but pieces (especially within the thesis statement) become absent making the thesis unconnected to idea and references of total essay. check for grammatic error.
highlighted in purple the parts that must be revise or conjo